First of all, I like how mysterious everything was. That kept me reading and wanting for more. I also like gore and stuff.. the story has some hints of it for me and I love that. The description is great but I think you could do better.
The flow could be better with the right spacing and such.. the paragraphs to be exact. I would like some paragraphs to be broken down to parts so it would be easier to read and add up to the vision/effect.
Other than that, great job! I love it. The suspense is settling in my mind. I would definitely want the continuation.
Thank you so much. I know I have problems with spacings / paragraphs, and sometimes descriptions.
I will work on it some more, and will most likely carry it on.